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Greeneyesreddragon
02-12-2004, 06:30 PM
This is my fanfic with
a new surprise ending!


Chapter#1:The wife of Pegasus

In the video game shop there sat Yugi Moto facing his best friend Joey,Yugi layed down a trap card when Joey attacked the card that Joey put out"The Flaming Swordsman"then the trapwas revealed the iron chain that crushed joey`s lifepoints down to 0.Yugi had won 4000/4000 and in the first hit Yugi had won...but that was impossible,then suddenly Yugi`s face sneered into a grin and he threw a punch into Joey`s face then slammed his head againest a table and there stood the wife of Pegasus.Then she stole Yugi`s millinium puzzle ans Joey`s millinium eye and rod then took them towards the canisters she had on her cart then teleported away and had the shopping cart with her...then she saw Bandit Keith and Yami Bakura fighting and wanted to get the millinium necklace and the millinium key!

MonkeyMasterTao9
02-12-2004, 06:46 PM
Weird. Not many details and it could be longer.

Sailor Mars Dragon
02-12-2004, 08:37 PM
Sorry Greeneyes, but this doesn't make much sense. Whats going on?

Super Saiyan Yugi
02-13-2004, 02:30 PM
Really weird and you could've done it much longer. Not a bad idea though...

NevrMore
02-13-2004, 02:42 PM
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What?


So, Yugi beats Joey, then hurts him because he won? out of character. Pegasus's wife appears out of nowhere? Makes no sense. Teleports away? How. Joey and Yugi not even doing anything? Stupid. Suddenly sees bandit keith (whom is DEAD) and Yami bakura fighting? Not right. Sentences? Non existent. Length? half a foot.

Sorry to be rude but try again.